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Post by Ponte Vedra on May 10, 2003 22:39:57 GMT -5
This is just something I wrote for when I am RPing in the NATIONSTATES forum.
I just wanted to know what you all think about this. This captain gets a new command during a time of war after his last one was crippled. I am interested in what you think. Post your comments. I am putting it in the next post because it is very long, almost two pages one a normal WORD document.
Please exuse all of the markings where I have yet to put in the captain's name, the ship's name and class, and that sort. Sorry about that, but I will fill that in when I actually post it.
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Post by Ponte Vedra on May 10, 2003 22:42:59 GMT -5
Please mentally fill in the Captains First name, the Ships name and class. I will modify it when I put it on the actual forums to fit the actual ship discription. Until then this is a trial run.
__________________ Nevada Naval Base The drive from SACPAC headquarters took ten minutes. The Marines at the main gate were checking everyone and everything carefully, even a Chevy with a three-star flag. They drove to the waterfront amid an unending flurry of activity. Trains rolled down the tracks set in the streets, repair shops and testing facilities worked around the clock. Even the fast food joint on the road immediately outside was working a twenty-four hour day, feeding hamburgers and fries to the men who took a few minutes for nourishment. For sailors spending a day or so on land it was an important, if seemingly trivial, touchstone. The car turned right as it reached the docks, past the submarine piers to the ones that held destroyers. “She’s brand new, only a month in commission, just about long enough to calibrate the electronics, and they must have shaved some time on that,” the Admiral said. “Captain Wilkens did continuous workups on the transit from the Nuremberg Naval station, but nothing with helicopters yet. PACFLT kept hers, and I can’t give you a regular helo complement either. All we have left is one Seahawk-F variant, a new one they were evaluating down at the Ruhrian Isles conflict.” “The one with the dipping sonar?” _______Put CAPTAINS Name Here________ asked. “I can live with that. How about a driver who knows how to use it?” “It’s covered. Lieutenant Commander O’Mally. We pulled him out of a training billet at PACFLT HQ.” “I’ve heard the name. He was doing systems qualifications on Dark Sky when I was tactical action officer on Lorinser. Yeah, he knows the job.” “Have to drop you off here. I’ll be back in an hour, after I have a look at what’s left of the Gardener” -----Ship Name here-----. Her clipper bow marked with hull number 26 hung over the dock like a guillotine blade. His weariness momentarily forgotten, _____Captain’s Name Here__________stepped out of the Chevy to examine his new command wwith all the quiet enthusiasm of a man with his newborn child. He’d seen ____Class Name and type of ship here_______. But never been aboard one. Her severe hull lines reminded him of a Cigarette racing yacht. 8 five inch mooring lines secured her to the pier, but the sleek from already seemed to be straining them. At only ____Tonnage here____ tons full load, a large ship but manifestly a fast one to go in harm’s war. Her superstructure was an aesthetic embarrassment, with all the grace of brick garage, topped with antenna whips and radar masts that looked like they had been built by a child’s erector set, but ________Captain’s last name only______ saw the functional simplicity of the design. The ______Ship class here______’s ______number of VLS tubes here________ were tucked away in circular racks forward. Her boxy after deckhouse contained enough room for a pair of deadly ASW helicopters. Her superstructure as boxy because it had to be. This was a warship and whatever beauty ____Ship Name Here_____ might have had was accidental. Sailors wearing blue shirts and jeans moved rapidly across three gangways, bringing supplies aboard for an immediate sailing. Morris walked briskly to the after gangway. A Marine guard saluted him at the foot of the brow and an officer on the ____Ship class here_____’s deck frantically ordered preparartions to receive his new CO. The ship’s bell was struck four times, and ___Rank, First and Last Name___ assumed his new identity. “____Ship Name Here____, arriving.” _______Captain’s last name______ saluted the colors, then the officer of the deck. “Sir, we didn’t expect you for another---” the lieutenant blurted. “How’s the work going?” ______Captains last name_____ cut him off. “Two more hours, tops, sir.” “Fine.” ______Captains last name_____ smiled. “We can worry about the Mickey Mouse later. Get back to work, Mister---“ “Lyles, sir. Ship Control Officer.” And what the hell is that? ______Captains last name_____ wondered. “Okay, Mr. Lyles. Where’s the XO?” “Right here, skipper.” The executive officer had grease on his shirt and a smudge on his cheek. “I was in the generator room. Pardon the way I look.” “What kind of shape are we in?” “It’ll do. Full load of fuel and weapons. The tail’s fully calibrated---“ “How’d you do that so fast?” “It wasn’t easy, sir, but we got it done. How’s captain Wilkens?” “The docs say he’ll be all right, but----well, he’s out of the business for a while. I’m ______Captain’s fist and Last name_____.” Captain and executive officer shook hands. “Frank Ernst. First time I’ve operated in the Atlantic Fleet.” The lieutenant commander smiled crookedly. “Picked a great time for it. Anyway, he’re in good shape, skipper. Everything works. Our helo pilot’s up in the Combat Information Center with the tactical guys. We got Jerry the Hammer. I played ball with him at the Academy, he’s good people. We got three real good chiefs. One’s a qualified officer of the deck. The crew’s on the young side, but I’d say we’re about as ready as you could ask. Ready to sail in two, three hours, tops. Where’s your personal gear, sir?” “It ought to be here in half an hour. What was the problem below?” “No sweat. An oil line let go on number-three diesel generator. Yard goof, wasn’t welded right. It’s fixed. You’ll love the engine room, skipper. On builders trials in five foot seas we topped out at thirty-three-and-a-half knots.” Ernst raised his eyebrows. “Fast enough?” “And the stabilizers?” _____Captains Last Name_____ asked. “They work just fine, skipper.” “What about the ASW troops?” “Let’s meet ‘em.” ______Captain’s last name_____ followed his XO into the superstructure. They proceeded forward between the two helicopter hangars, then to the left past officers’ country and up a ladder. The Combat Information Center was located one level below and just aft of the bridge, adjoining the commanding officer’s stateroom. Dark as a cave, it was new than his last ship and larger, but no less crammed. Twenty or more people were at work running a simulation in the CIC. The Captain was glad to have his new ship in much better shape than his last one, at least she is still running.
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Post by Ponte Vedra on May 11, 2003 10:32:56 GMT -5
So...I noticed that several of you have seen this YET NEGLECTED TO READ IT!
<steps outside and pulls gun to head>
<CLICK!>
damnIT! A DUD!
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Post by Qantrix on May 11, 2003 13:47:18 GMT -5
I'm sorry it's just too long, 2 lazy
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New People
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Post by New People on May 11, 2003 15:25:48 GMT -5
You guys are bums. You're no good to the Alliance if you don't have an attention span.
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Post by Ponte Vedra on May 11, 2003 19:22:56 GMT -5
You guys are bums. You're no good to the Alliance if you don't have an attention span. I concur! Hey, did you read it? What do you think?
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Post by B4kst4br on May 11, 2003 21:31:13 GMT -5
did u kno that the average attention span is the number of years old you are in seconds e.g. im 16 years old that meens my attention span is 16 seconds long
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Post by Ponte Vedra on May 12, 2003 17:28:22 GMT -5
Well, I am personally offended by all of you!
Until then, I will spit on your shoes and slap people arbitrarily!
*Spit* *Slap* *Spit* *Slap*
Hahahahaa
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Post by Grinder on May 12, 2003 17:30:47 GMT -5
I read it. I really quite enjoyed it. I am sorry that these fools do not have the mental capability to pay attention for more than 16-20 seconds.
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Post by Ponte Vedra on May 12, 2003 20:20:57 GMT -5
Grinder, thanks.
I am just waiting for a good time to use it.
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Post by New People on May 12, 2003 22:22:38 GMT -5
did u kno that the average attention span is the number of years old you are in seconds e.g. im 16 years old that meens my attention span is 16 seconds long Witness the Pokemon generation.
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Post by Alpha C on Jun 2, 2003 22:22:43 GMT -5
I just read it. I liked it very much. Have you used it yet?
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Post by Halmont on Jun 3, 2003 16:09:33 GMT -5
I've just read it... i find it interesting, but it is good... to much reading but i managed... *thumbs up*
-Halmont
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